> > I wrote a poem and submitted it to a contest. My self-confidence is feeling a bit shaky, so I thought I'd put it up and see what you all think. I want constructive critiscm on it, by which of course I mean I want you to tell me the truth, except if it's bad. Then tell me it's good. Anyway, here's the poem:
> >
> > She stands outside, next to the oak tree,
> > Sunlight dappling her chestnut hair,
> > Her paintbrush gently strokes over the canvas
> > Leaving an emerald trail.
> > Lost to the world,
> > Enamored of the gentle tones of her palette,
> > She works obliviously.
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> I hate hate hate giving criticism because I'm so afraid I'll hurt people's feelings! I know I tend to get really defensive and upset when people give me constructive remarks on my poetry (which I should stop doing, I know) so I just want to make absolutely sure that you won't get mad at me! Okay? :-}
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> That said, I think your poem creates a lovely picture. I can see the girl's hair in the wind... it's very nice. The only thing I'd suggest would be to tighten up the wording a bit. The word "outside" in the first line and "over" in the third struck me as unnecessary as I was reading. Also, you might not need the line "lost to the world," (though it does give it a sort of dreamy air) since the obliviously at the end says the same thing.
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> But really, I'd say you defintely have some potential as a poet. :-}
>
> ~Mina "and while everyone's in a poetic mood, I'll throw in a plug for myself..." moon

I hate giving critiscm too, for the same reasons. But don't worry, you didn't hurt my feelings. As a matter of fact, I'd meant to take the word 'over' out and actually did in the version I submitted to the contest, but since that was handwritten I didn't think about the version I'd already typed up. Anyway, you made some good points, and I'll work on them. Now, off to check out your poems!

Silver"should probably have read them before replying"Moon