> I wrote a poem and submitted it to a contest. My self-confidence is feeling a bit shaky, so I thought I'd put it up and see what you all think. I want constructive critiscm on it, by which of course I mean I want you to tell me the truth, except if it's bad. Then tell me it's good. Anyway, here's the poem:
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> She stands outside, next to the oak tree,
> Sunlight dappling her chestnut hair,
> Her paintbrush gently strokes over the canvas
> Leaving an emerald trail.
> Lost to the world,
> Enamored of the gentle tones of her palette,
> She works obliviously.

I hate hate hate giving criticism because I'm so afraid I'll hurt people's feelings! I know I tend to get really defensive and upset when people give me constructive remarks on my poetry (which I should stop doing, I know) so I just want to make absolutely sure that you won't get mad at me! Okay? :-}

That said, I think your poem creates a lovely picture. I can see the girl's hair in the wind... it's very nice. The only thing I'd suggest would be to tighten up the wording a bit. The word "outside" in the first line and "over" in the third struck me as unnecessary as I was reading. Also, you might not need the line "lost to the world," (though it does give it a sort of dreamy air) since the obliviously at the end says the same thing.

But really, I'd say you defintely have some potential as a poet. :-}

~Mina "and while everyone's in a poetic mood, I'll throw in a plug for myself..." moon