I can't imagine a way to improve it. Sorry.
samhael

> I wrote a poem and submitted it to a contest. My self-confidence is feeling a bit shaky, so I thought I'd put it up and see what you all think. I want constructive critiscm on it, by which of course I mean I want you to tell me the truth, except if it's bad. Then tell me it's good. Anyway, here's the poem:
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> She stands outside, next to the oak tree,
> Sunlight dappling her chestnut hair,
> Her paintbrush gently strokes over the canvas
> Leaving an emerald trail.
> Lost to the world,
> Enamored of the gentle tones of her palette,
> She works obliviously.