> I wrote a poem, though I'm not a poet (I think this is the first actual poem I've written). It's inspired by an idea from Revelation 21. Let me know your thoughts. I have some explanation and information I can give for it, but I'll let you read it and react to it first. The Rinkforum destroys the formatting if I copy and paste, so I put it on my livejournal (this is the first and probably the last post I'll put on there since I use it exclusively for commenting, so you probably don't need to bookmark it).
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> Let me know any thoughts, reactions, comments, critiques. I'm more interested in hearing your thoughts and reactions to it than your critiques, but I welcome those also.

I have to say, Revelation 21 is a very beautiful chapter in the Bible, and the various verses (1 - 5) could clearly be seen in the language that you used, even some verbatim phrases, and in that, I think that the poem is well thought out.